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From Yellow to Blue
Take a night out of your life
And what makes it all change?
Take a night out of your life
And watch it all change
Take the light out of the day
And what makes it all change?
Take the light out of the day
And I swear it’s all strange
Come inside, and sleep till winter
Come inside, and dream it all better
Take the love out of your heart
And what makes it all change?
Take the love out of your heart
And I swear you won’t feel the same
Take the pain out of love
And what makes it all change?
Take the pain our of love
And I swear you won’t love again
Come inside, and dry from the rain
Come inside, it’s warm don’t complain
You’re all I had
You’re all I ever had
Take your soul from your life
And what makes it all change?
Take your soul from your life
And I swear you won’t die again
Come inside, and sleep till you’re better
Come inside, and dream it all over
You were all I had loved
You were all I had ever loved
All I ever felt was love for you
In shades from yellow to blue
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Comments
CCfire
Fri, 2011-05-06 00:51
Gee I hope these are lyrics
Gee I hope these are lyrics because the more I read the more I could feel the music and beat in this, I perhaps am not so fond of your ending as the rest of it. Just think perhaps there is one too many lines with 'love' in it and the repetition at the end seems to weaken it for me. I would love to hear this set to music
Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche
Ayaz Warith
Fri, 2011-05-06 02:45
Dear WT, this is just
Dear WT, this is just beautiful and sad. I reckon I should sing this poem as a love song for someone. Lovely piece.
Thanks for sharing
Regards
Ayaz