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Who Lost?...

As Sir Gee rides through the rain slicked alley
He considers the truth of man
There are knights on big white horses
And then there are Killer fans

This knight has won many battles
His armour is dented and worn
The sword he wields is dulled
His gentle heart is torn

The twisted twin of Sir Gee
Stone-cold killer, an empty soul
He slays the evil he finds
To fill his empty bowl

Slaying terrible dragons
Killer; is in his mind
A black knight of steel and darkness
A knight of a different kind

Sir Gee is a spear of light
Rides his charger right into the fray
His waving banner,rallies people's hearts
And sometimes saves the day

But not this time, he's lost this one
Though he gave it all his might
Killer was too strong for him
He lost this one tonight

Sir Gee gives pause to think a while
"The many battles we had"
"We've rid the world of a lot of shit"
"I guess that's not so bad"

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I went on this ride with you and after reading your story the other day I am totally agreeing with the content and the emotion in this write. You keep up the good work. There was one little trip up here

He lost this one too night

He lost this one tonight

I am glad you are okay. Close call in a crazy world..

Happy Easter Geez
Mona

the battle to let it go, and let the authorities take care of it. Killer was too strong for him that night.

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I'm a great fan of this duo! Killer kicks ass while Sir Gee rights wrongs.

Slaying terrible dragons
Killer; is in his mind
A black knight of steel and darkness
A knight of a different kind

Sir Gee gives pause to think a while
"The many battles we had"
"We've rid the world of a lot of shit"
"I guess that's not so bad"

write on...

love Cat & styx

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thanks for being such a fan of Killer and Sir Gee, they are fans of you and Eddy. We ought to get them all together, when the chats come up again, and have a real free-for-all, against the baddies. Be sure and join us on Chat On The Darkside, when we start up. It will be the first and third Sat. of every mo. from 8pm. - 10pm. EST. Love ya ~ Gee

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Thal would love the play between these two.
Gotta get her reading it.
Best poem yet.
I've got a feeling
It's gonna keep getting better.
Thx 4 sharing.
This is fun.

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that you like Killer and Sir Gee, I haven't seen much of them lately, I think that they are off in Aussieland or someplace, taking out the bad guys. I'm sure that they will show up soon, with a whole new bunch of tales to tell! ~ Geez.
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Super excited now!
Hope they get back soon.
G'day mate.

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