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Unchoreographed
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jumping
hunched
puddles
billowing trenchcoat
drenched
twisting
twirling umbrella
fitter as litter
I tell ya
negotiating
wind and rain
becomes
dance
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Comments
Arrow
Sat, 2011-04-30 20:56
Is jimping a word?
"almost"--oh, argh, I can't decide whether I like that there or not. After reading the poem, it so clearly IS dance that "I tell ya" I kinda don't like it. I'd love to see an illustration for this.
brittle light
Sat, 2011-04-30 22:14
jimping changed to jumping ..
jimping changed to jumping ...t'was a typo.
also in deference to your read and take, dropped the "almost"
appreciate your read and comments
thank you
Al
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