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a silent muse

I searched my pockets
for the words lost
somewhere between lint
and forgotten hopes

I searched the shores
watched the waves crash
loudly against the grains
as they pulled each vowel
into the open sea

I searched a sky
no longer filled with stars
just a moon imprinted
with a wordless face

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I really feel this write and must come back for second read.. Amazing it is.. this part I felt so strongly

I searched the shores
watched the waves crash
loudly against the grains
as they pulled each vowel
into the open sea

awesome metaphors used and nice to meet you. I do not know if we ever met before. My name is Magics but real name is Mona. Hope to read more of you...this poem hit me and I so liked it much..

how strange that I should be reading a piece by you while you read one of mine. I don't think we have met but it is lovely to meet you.
These words have been rattling around in my mind for ages but tonight I finally sat and finished getting it down.

thank you for reading and I'm glad you liked it

~Juls~

"While I'm writing, I'm far away;
and when I come back, I've gone."
— Pablo Neruda

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Nice to meet you also and no it is not strange it is the spirit working in the interactions as you read my piece and I read yours. I want to revisit this one again for there is a powerful message contained in it and of it.

Blessings of love
Ms Mona

The moon has many phases, you are having a bad one but it will pass my bestie, it will pass xx

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

I know, there is hope for better things x

~Juls~

"While I'm writing, I'm far away;
and when I come back, I've gone."
— Pablo Neruda

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Thanks for reading and for your comment

~Juls~

"While I'm writing, I'm far away;
and when I come back, I've gone."
— Pablo Neruda

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The draw of the sea, the draw of the moon, I have just experienced trying to get out of the sea up a beach of moving little stones the suck of the waves drawing me back into the water, I see each stone a vowel, a word, and they are dawn into the depths of the dark ocean where they are so difficult to read.

Well put this poem 49ner, yours Ann of Norway

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

I do enjoy knowing what my pieces invoke in others. Thank you for reading & your comment.

~Juls~

"While I'm writing, I'm far away;
and when I come back, I've gone."
— Pablo Neruda

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Thank you very much

~Juls~

"While I'm writing, I'm far away;
and when I come back, I've gone."
— Pablo Neruda

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Now your truly writing beatiful. your expressions are so clear in your acrobatic mastery of your words.
The fear is gone of your first days
I am so happy to have the chance to write these beautiful words, I can see the pain but also the hope of better days.
Eddie C.

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

I'm starting to feel alot more comfortable around here.
You know, there has to be hope otherwise we wallow in a mire of depression.
Thanks for reading & commenting
.

~Juls~

"While I'm writing, I'm far away;
and when I come back, I've gone."
— Pablo Neruda

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I love to collect useless information. You never know when you might need to use it
thanks for reading

~Juls~

"While I'm writing, I'm far away;
and when I come back, I've gone."
— Pablo Neruda

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