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it's better if she doesn't know...
it's better if she doesn't know,
better keep it from than to say it all,
i felt stronger yet i always show
a big desire for an impossible....
if she knew my feelings, she might build a wall
and eventually she might hide her glow,
when on is a sight of an untimely fall,
it's always better if she doesn't know...
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
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Is the internal logic consistent?
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Comments
whitescatter
Sun, 2010-10-31 09:24
tnx for the constructive comment..
i will use it for further works..don't u know that what im referring here is "moon"....
author commentIan.T
Mon, 2014-12-29 18:46
White
It is four years now and about time this one was polished for the new Neopoet,
Yours Ian.T
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