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lou
Mon, 2011-04-25 04:20
Hi
I like it very apt.
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
brittle light
Mon, 2011-04-25 18:17
Hi to you, Lou
thanks...this one almost sounds like the joke form "did you ever hear the one about a poet who got lost?"
Al
crypticbard
Mon, 2011-04-25 06:46
That is reminiscent
of cryptic poetry. And therein lay between lines and rhymes
underneath the allusions and metaphor, a cry from deep within the poet,
I wonder if he really goes unheard. Or is his reader unable to send back
a suitable reply? A strong haiku.
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'write on! let these words free.'
brittle light
Mon, 2011-04-25 18:30
there seems to be more in
there seems to be more in this than I consciously considered....that how it works sometimes....thank god, or somebody. I tend to think my stuff as more shallow than I wish it to be. I'm grateful when others perceive something of substence or relative depth. Bolstering my shakey poetic ego
thanks for your always mellifluous comments
Al
crypticbard
Tue, 2011-04-26 06:35
the quiet truth
of the poetic matter is that every person that takes pen to paper in poetry has a certain measure of depth to them, even the rhymesters and poeticules, which I don't find surprising but a relief. A depth in the shallows can be very brilliant as well. Keep that chin up Al, your poetic ego is in a safe haven.
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'write on! let these words free.'
CCfire
Mon, 2011-04-25 07:06
Clever Haiku lol the matter
Clever Haiku lol the matter of the metaphor? I heard from a wise teacher that nothing is right or wrong in poetry and I adhere to that lol of course it gets me into trouble with the purists but I've never been one to conform :)
Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche
brittle light
Mon, 2011-04-25 18:40
thanks again for responding..
thanks again for responding....
you have a beautiful and genuine smile
with respect
Al
CCfire
Tue, 2011-04-26 09:37
Thank you, I will take the
Thank you, I will take the compliment with the grace it was given :)
Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche
Race_9togo
Mon, 2011-04-25 18:26
Hey Al
Good Haiku.
"Mataphor" = "Metaphor"?
Respectfully, Race
"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo
http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo
brittle light
Mon, 2011-04-25 18:35
Jim
thanks for the spelling correction....and the comment
Al
magics02
Mon, 2011-04-25 23:10
I like it
Hello BL how are you. I just came across this and I read it once, twice, three times and there is a sublime message in it. Good Haiku. Lood forward to reading more of you.
Blessings
Mona