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( Haiku )
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sentience rekindled
eyes are brightened, heart is thawed
smiles from a daughter
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CCfire
Mon, 2011-04-25 06:59
Traditionally I think this is
Traditionally I think this is a Senryu as it holds reference to a person rather than a Haiku that is nature personified. But even in that, this is a lovely smile.
Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche
brittle light
Mon, 2011-04-25 18:09
Yes, Senyru.....I use Haiku
Yes, Senyru.....I use Haiku as the prime set , ( senyru as a subset )... for those less esoteric than yourself!
Is my elitism showing? I shall stop this practice immediately! haiku for haiku, senyru for senyru, from now on when clearly discernible.
your visits are always enjoyable
sincerely
Al
author commentRace_9togo
Mon, 2011-04-25 18:28
Hi Al
Another good one, I love the image here, so vivid and intense.
Senryu...haiku...lol just call it "japan-esque"!
Respectfully, Race
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brittle light
Mon, 2011-04-25 18:58
I like it "Japan-esque"
I like it "Japan-esque" works for me...and thanks for the life affirming compliment
Al
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