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haiku II

" The universe can,
influence impact on life.
Stand there and watch it"

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Structured: Eastern
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That's the idea, people forget to look. My lady (Jonette) and l always go for walks and gaze at the marvel of the universe. it's a beautiful thing for me that she enjoys it as much as I.
so go enjoy and make it a habit so as to not forget, we are but specks
Thank you sweetie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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Alot said in a few words! We just need to stand and watch sometimes.

Thanks for sharing.

Love Mand xxxxxx

thanks for stopping by and your comment

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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You know old tinker just can't help but give folks alternatives lol.L-2 try: influence and impact life, to see if it fits your intent. Damn, can't even do a Haiku without scribbler sticking his nose in...............stan

NOOO!
hahaha!
I like your idea alot, but i won't do it. hard headed sometimes.
thank you stan i always appreciate your help.

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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universal stars
bide time on earth until we
enter the darkness

Your haiku more than contemplates our place in it all. Nice job.

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

I bow in thank you!

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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I think you excel in this style. I really like this, such short words..powerful message

Bravo Maestro Ed

Mona
xox

thank you for the brilliant,
I am humbled by your comment, but I am far from a "Maestro"
Again thank you very much!

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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listen to the birds
whisper of a gentle breeze
sweet music to ears

raj (sublime_ocean)

Don't post beautiful things like that on my page, your making me look bad. Hahaha!
Thanks for stopping by Raj, nice of you to visit!

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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lol..i attempted to add frills to the lovely message in your beautiful haiku..

raj (sublime_ocean)

And a fine addition that it is.
Thanks again,

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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