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haiku II
" The universe can,
influence impact on life.
Stand there and watch it"
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Eduardo Cruz
Fri, 2011-04-22 04:42
Rosi
That's the idea, people forget to look. My lady (Jonette) and l always go for walks and gaze at the marvel of the universe. it's a beautiful thing for me that she enjoys it as much as I.
so go enjoy and make it a habit so as to not forget, we are but specks
Thank you sweetie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
mand
Fri, 2011-04-22 04:21
Hi Eddie
Alot said in a few words! We just need to stand and watch sometimes.
Thanks for sharing.
Love Mand xxxxxx
Eduardo Cruz
Fri, 2011-04-22 22:15
mand
thanks for stopping by and your comment
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
scribbler
Fri, 2011-04-22 22:43
hello Eddie
You know old tinker just can't help but give folks alternatives lol.L-2 try: influence and impact life, to see if it fits your intent. Damn, can't even do a Haiku without scribbler sticking his nose in...............stan
Eduardo Cruz
Fri, 2011-04-22 22:51
Stan
NOOO!
hahaha!
I like your idea alot, but i won't do it. hard headed sometimes.
thank you stan i always appreciate your help.
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
CCfire
Fri, 2011-04-22 22:46
universal stars
universal stars
bide time on earth until we
enter the darkness
Your haiku more than contemplates our place in it all. Nice job.
Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche
Eduardo Cruz
Sat, 2011-04-23 15:32
Chez
I bow in thank you!
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
magics02
Sat, 2011-04-23 11:04
Brilliant Ed
I think you excel in this style. I really like this, such short words..powerful message
Bravo Maestro Ed
Mona
xox
Eduardo Cruz
Sat, 2011-04-23 15:05
Mona
thank you for the brilliant,
I am humbled by your comment, but I am far from a "Maestro"
Again thank you very much!
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
raj
Sun, 2011-04-24 05:28
If i may add
listen to the birds
whisper of a gentle breeze
sweet music to ears
raj (sublime_ocean)
Eduardo Cruz
Sun, 2011-04-24 05:34
Hey you!
Don't post beautiful things like that on my page, your making me look bad. Hahaha!
Thanks for stopping by Raj, nice of you to visit!
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
raj
Sun, 2011-04-24 05:41
Hi Eddie
lol..i attempted to add frills to the lovely message in your beautiful haiku..
raj (sublime_ocean)
Eduardo Cruz
Sun, 2011-04-24 07:41
Raj
And a fine addition that it is.
Thanks again,
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE