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ORPHANELL, ON A RAINY DAY

ORPHANELL, ON A RAINY DAY
© Cyrus Dali Vesuvala
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Orphanell, on a rainy day,
On an afternoon in June-
Though you wish your man would stay
That’s crying for the moon-
But, through your silent teacup storms,
Through lonely days like these,
Oh, Orphanell, I share your stormy seas...

Orphanell, you have a friend:
You have a saving grace-
Through afternoons without an end,
In such a lonely place-
Because, one rainy afternoon,
Beneath dark loaded skies,
Did you unload the sadness in your eyes.

And now I realize
That the reason's not the heat and dust and flies
Because, one rainy afternoon,
Beneath dark loaded skies,
Did you unload the sadness in your eyes.

So, Orphanell, on a rainy day,
On an afternoon in June...
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If you'd like to hear the SUNG version of this here's a link to a new recording I made just today: 16th April 2011)
http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=10530416
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As lyrics this has a wonderful flow to it, I am enjoying reading yours.

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

Glad you enjoyed the lyric. I have today added a few lines and given a link to a new recording of the song that I made today, in case you'd like to hear the sung version of this poem.

Thanks you for stopping by to read.

Psyve

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I had to look up Orphanell (shows my limited education I guess) and google lead me to a music page by psyve. Darn interesting music there. So I am off to your profile to find out a bit more. Some lovely lines in this poem and I liked reading it, especially on a rainy day in Wild Dunes. As for lines I really liked “unload the sadness in your eyes” Hope you don’t mind if I follow you.

vexations

Orphanell is simply a "cloaked" version of a real name. So it does not reflect on your education in the slightest that you had to look that up.

That said, I'm pleased you did, because that led you to the repository of some of my songs.

Thank you for listening and glad you liked what you heard there.

Incidentally, I just re-recorded "Orphanell..." this afternoon and have added a link to the NEW recording just below the body of the lyric above.

Would be please to hear your thoughts on this one, if you get around to listening to it...

Thank you again for taking the time: I do appreciate it.

Psyve

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I applaud your lyrics and your song, great to hear it done this way. Thank you Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Thank you. Appreciate very much that you took the time to read and listen.
Pleased that you liked it too.
Regards
Psyve

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