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Is It Love or Is It Lust

When I hear your voice
I feel warm inside, like
Butterflies gliding in the wind
On a hot summer day

When I see your smile
My flesh tingles with passion, like
Goose bumps on my skin
On a cool breezy day

When I imagine your touch
I feel a hot stream building, like
Hot springs on Niagara Falls
In the depths of my stomach

Is it love or is it lust
Love is, lust does, can’t have one without the other

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How does this theme appeal to you?
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I tend to shy away from contact of such in writing poetry. But may do a little for this one as a small addition to it.
Blow a fuse, may wanna leave out the contact. lol

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one of the best of your I've read.................scribbler

Glad you think its that good.

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i liked the theme of this write which enquires if the feelings and emotions expressed in each stanza relate to love or lust...i believe love is like a gentle soothing refreshing breeze whereas lust is like a whirlwind...

the two can also be compared to the gentle waves lapping that the shores for the former and a tdle wave bursting at the shores...

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Glad you like the theme. I have been dreaming up new themes to write about. takes real imagination.

"i believe love is like a gentle soothing refreshing breeze whereas lust is like a whirlwind...

the two can also be compared to the gentle waves lapping that the shores for the former and a tdle wave bursting at the shores..."

I like your deffinition of the love and lust. Never thought of it that way. Wow I really can see picture while stand on the shore.

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I read my poem with your thoughts in mind and I like it. Your meaning changes the meaning of my ending. I like it also
Love holds back Lust does it all without shame.

Love is gentle Lust is wild. I see you can have one without the other.
Put the two together what do you get. I must think about that one again.

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in the context of what you have said as one being the pre cursor of the other..one can compare love with a spring with its gentle waters flowing in a stream and on the way it gathers speed as it courses through and gets wild in a free fall when it turns into rapids which is like an orgasmic burst....

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I like the train of thought you have going on here and all the emotions and feelings writing to page. I like this one Barbara. You tell it like you feel it and see it and I like that alot to about you dear writer.

Blessings
Mona

Not easy to write down. glad it tickled you fancy. lol

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I always like your poems and this one is no exception.

You have made excellent use of similies - it helped to evok the feeling that you wanted to convey.

Thanks for sharing

Love Mand xxxxx

A smile is precious and warms my heart. especially those on the faces of beautiful little babies

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Thus is true of love and lust thanks for sharing your naughty find. lol

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I'm glad you stop by and read.

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I am Chez and new here, I stopped by to read and meet. This is quite good and I agree with the statement ending here. Neither one exists without the other, it just becomes more comfortable the further the years go :)

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

Welcome to Neopoet. I'm glad you stop by and read. thanks for kind comment

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it is so nice if you lust the one you love, nice write my friend

You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down

thanks for reading and commenting I really appreciate. Welcome to neopoet. Nice comment. some fall in love at first sight, some fall in love later. whether its lust at first sight or lust after many years its all good. :)

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I have never seen it that way,but then after reading this I guess I have changed my mind...nice work

we all see love and lust in different ways. I reckon this is how I see it. thanks for sharing your thoughts

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