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Who the fool

Who the fool….

Some lie there on the bed of fools
finding so little insecurity.
Not one will search for a meaning to life
none will be asking what is an obscurity?

No answers will come raging forth, so
they can make their own conclusion.
Running faster now downhill, are we
escaping the madness or is it a delusion.

I see old hands now, where
a piano players fingers used to be.
I’ll be deeming this totally unfair
reaching for an enigmatic key.

The first two verses were about the fool,
though I was trying not to be overtly cruel.
One may say their life is beset with trouble,
but unlike them we live outside that bubble.

Do we???

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Thank you, i'm sorry for this late reply,t started a new job and it keeps me rather busy, Love Roscoe

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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Thank you Rosi, i'm sorry for this late reply. Love Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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I've wondered about this many times...how do fools get by, when I had to work hard at developing my character
and life skills... thinking I've got it covered...and yet, I am, and will be, beset with many of the same consequences (as the fool).
ain't that a kick in the ass?
I enjoyed this piece of writing

Al

Thank you, I have always wondered if we maybe the fools, slaving away for what. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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Thank you, I'm sorry for late reply but i'm rather busy with a new job, Enjoyed the music. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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Since the angels look out for fools, who does that leave to help us out lol. I enjoyed reading this but think the last line? or do we? or Don't we? just something to consider and best of luck with new job...........scribbler

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