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PSEUDO
You’re a pseudo hero
a counterfeit lover
meagre soul undercover
the antagonist who enchants
in a mock romance.
You’re an apocryphal fool
playing the game of chance
fallacious in his charm.
delusive creature quick to abuse.
impassioned women are misused.
An imaginary Don Juan,
a bogus Casanova.
a quasi member of the human race,
you’re disgrace.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
mona
Fri, 2010-10-29 11:43
This is Great write
you are a real great poet.
woow
amazing, and I really mean it.
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Mona Rose
lou
Fri, 2010-10-29 11:46
hi
hi mona
thanks
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Fri, 2010-10-29 13:18
hi
thanks shirl me girl
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Fri, 2010-10-29 17:07
hi
thanks xena
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
ziggy
Fri, 2010-10-29 18:32
hi
hi there louise this is strong I don't understand this completly but thats my fault lol
you can explain it to me when we chat hope your well ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs x
the first stanza is my fav its brill
I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.
lou
Fri, 2010-10-29 23:07
Zigs
Awww thanks mate , I'll explain it to ya lol
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Sat, 2010-10-30 06:05
Lol
Think we are both confused lol
Hugs Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
judyanne
Sun, 2010-10-31 10:57
great write lou
did you mean 'you're A disgrace' for your last line?
love judy
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
lou
Sun, 2010-10-31 23:45
Jude
Thank you. I'll correct that line.
Love Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Hooded Stranger
Tue, 2010-11-09 13:07
Lou
I was privy to this one before you posted it and I have to say this one grows on you. The first time you sent it to me, it was ok, but i wasn't dragged into it. I have read it maybe ten times since that first read and it gets better with each read...it is fast becoming one of my favourites of yours.
I also know a little of what inspired this write and you have hooked it perfectly!
you ain't 'alf bad ya know!
HS
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lou
Tue, 2010-11-09 23:45
HS
Thank you , your comments mean a lot to me.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
CCfire
Sat, 2011-04-02 17:19
Reminds me
of some of the jerks on the 'other' site I used to be on lol..this is strong writing with a vivid message, some people need their butt kicked from here to sunday. Great write. :)
Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche
lou
Sat, 2011-04-02 19:04
Hi
There are way too many men like this, but I think there are a few that are not lol
Thank you for reading.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
ziggy
Sat, 2011-04-02 17:29
hey there
this reads good this wordy piece
"You’re a pseudo hero
a counterfeit lover
meagre soul undercover
the antagonist who enchants
in a mock romance." like them lines for sure
up there with your best I reckon ,,,,,,,,,ziggy x
I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.
lou
Sat, 2011-04-02 19:07
Hey Zigs
Thank you I'm glad you think so.
Chat soon.
Love Louise
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Eduardo Cruz
Sat, 2011-04-02 19:58
lou
WOW, talk about a punch in the face!
great, now one to the gut just because...
Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
lou
Tue, 2011-05-10 15:57
Eddie
Thanks I'm glad you approve.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Tue, 2011-05-10 16:03
Theo
Thank you, but not sure why you feel it's specious.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
RoseBlack
Sun, 2024-02-04 21:00
Love this
I love the language and the whole premise of the poem. I am familiar with such fake Don Juan's. Your poem summed it up perfectly.
~RoseBlack~