Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
THE MOTH
After working until lack of light
I headed toward the homestead, bright
listening to all the peepers sing
on a late April evening
A moth came with me through the door
as if he'd often done the same before
he dove and fluttered through the air
above the couch and easy chair
I left him flitting in the den
as I went to the warm kitchen
to find my supper set out there
and my love with whom my day to share
After drying the last dish with cloth
I remarked about the vagrant moth
who now was perched high on the wall
looking gray and still and all
There he stayed for us to see
high up above our old T.V.
so still you'd nearly think him dead
not just resting his wings instead
As we watched our shows that night
while outside the moon rose full and bright
we'd glance at him once upon a while
then turn to each other and smile
Then came the time to go to bed
with the lovely girl I'd wed
we wondered if the moth would stay
and still be there at break of day
Comments
mand
Thu, 2011-03-31 09:43
Lovely Stan
You have captured a treasured moment. I felt as if I was there.
Thanks for sharing, can't think of anything to crit.
Love Mand xxxxx
scribbler
Thu, 2011-03-31 13:48
hi mand
It is often the little things that are remembered. Thank you for dropping by................stan
scribbler
Thu, 2011-03-31 17:39
hello
hence rough draft designation lol. I always welcome ideas, so feel free to suggest. Thanks for the visit.......scribbler
lou
Fri, 2011-04-01 04:16
Stan
I enjoyed this one, the the only thing that i would change is line 1 stanza 1, maybe you could say ' After working until the day turned into night'. I think that it would read better this way.
love lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
scribbler
Fri, 2011-04-01 09:05
hi lou
I appreciate your idea, but I have often worked outside until the lack of light to see by forced me to stop. Think I'll leave as is for now at least.Thank you for dropping by..................stan BTW what is translation of Kerouac quote?