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"Child Turned Whore"

It hides within shadows,
behind eyes,
venomous bile it spits,
into the mouths of all who notice.
Secret infatuations of lustful discontent,
it buries all hope in lies and disease.

Its flesh grown tattered from years of abused neglect.
It speaks in tongues that are understood by none.
It is master of its own head believing its own untruths.
Desperate in its search it vanishes before its tasted its goal.

It is no mystic creature of demon, dragon, nor serpent.
It looks in mirrors yet never sees, it talks but never listens.

This man shaped creature lurks,
watching, waiting.
Never humbled, never awake,
it sleepwalks throughout its poisoned life.

Pain becomes its inner most belief as it suffers.
It seeks vengeance for wrongs, never committed.
It is a scavenger of love, its heart melts for every woman.

It is vermin, it is pest.

Its traits are more that of insect than that of the higher order of animal.
It is man no more,
but instead has become a child turned whore.

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Free verse
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Comments

Very sensitive subject matter and very well done! I wish I had written it! My favorite lines:

Its traits are more that of insect than that of the higher order of animal.
It is man no more,
but instead has become a child turned whore.

Chilling!

always, Cat

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I don't write like this often, but I enjoy it when I do.I'm glad you liked and understood it:-)

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"For what is it to die, But to stand in the sun and melt into the wind?"

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All I can say is long may you continue.

love lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

I will try, lol

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Sorry that its taken me so long to get back to you.Its been beyond hectic around here.And you know that i appreciate all the help I can get:-)

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I am impressed with the darkness of your writing. You have a way of seeing deeper into the dregs of society than most. The children of this world, are what society makes them. We are a world of people who want everything, and we want it now! And we will trade our childhood for it. Good work, ~ Gee

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I'm glad you liked it, I like writing in this way.It can be interpreted in so many ways.Thanks again Gee.

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