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Hellion

Arrogant little freak
Assassin in the undergrowth
Marauder, ravaging my soul

Bandit, betrayer
Hellion, destroyer
Instigator of my ruin

Primordial, sensibility
Driving me insane
Slashing at my psyche
 
But I’m feisty and prepared
A quarrelsome girl
I’ll fight you tooth and claw
Won’t take your shit, anymore

I’m ornery and battle worn
A fractious little madam
I’ll fight you tooth and nail
Your distorted lies, I will unveil

On the surface a battler
Standing guard by my garrison
Protecting my vulnerabilities
 
Radical emotions
Beating me to a pulp
Scorching to the core

Primordial, sensibility
Driving me insane
Slashing at my psyche

(outro)
But I'm feisty, ornery and quarrelsome
Battle worn, prepared and fractious
I'll fight you tooth, nail and claw
Won't take shit from you, anymore

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Thank you to Hooded Stranger, for all his help with this song.
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But I’m feisty and prepared
A quarrelsome girl
I’ll fight you tooth and claw
Won’t take your shit, anymore

I’m ornery and battle worn
A fractious little madam
I’ll fight you tooth and nail
Your distorted lies, I will unveil

Great song. I love it! I have no suggestions, only appreciation for the work!

love, Cat

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Thank you , Dan played a big part in putting these lyrics together.

love Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Arrogant little freak
Assassin in the undergrowth
Marauder, ravaging my soul

Bandit, betrayer
Hellion, destroyer
Instigator of my ruin" good lines these like them indeed,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
interesting title , nothing to crit good job deserves more comments ,,,,,,,,,,,ziggy

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

Thanks bud, I am pleased that you found it , I thought it was another poem that was gonna be ignored , was thinking of giving up on this site, thanks for restoring my faith.

Love Louise xx

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Wow Lou I know this one felt good to write for I felt it and wish I could hear it now. I like that part of fight you tooth and nail. You put up a good glove in this one. Happy to read you once again

Mona
xox

Thanks

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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