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her transparent embrace

Submitted by whitetea on Fri, 2011-02-25 04:49

tactile
angel

who lifts
above

flows
through

the water's
veins

buoyant
sprinkle away tempests

for prayers
of midnight's oasis

empathy
resides.

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Esker

Fri, 2011-02-25 13:06

Esker's picture

like the two line
and breaks

spent today giving back

and looking ahead in my loved city

"oasis" read much on bedouins
(am well read)

world is hurting now
we need empathy
as poets as people

well written concise
and made me think

thank you Whitetea
I have always loved
your poetry

Kailashana2

Fri, 2011-02-25 13:15

not that I believe in angels, though I sure would like to, but I believe in your poem, White Tea,

empathy flows through our thawing veins

~A

whitetea

Wed, 2011-03-09 05:41

whitetea's picture

not sure about angels, or religion.

another lesbian love poem

thanks kalia for reading

author comment

Kailashana2

Wed, 2011-03-09 16:52

lesbian? i think it transcends sexuality or better, embraces. ;-)

~A

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