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Dance of Purification...

I started this off listening to Iron Maiden Symphonic Medley II
Epic Symphonic Rock.
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Twisting steps of chasse`
maneuvers born of skill
Knives slicing air and darkness
trying for the kill

A dance of death and horror
two bodies 'round and 'round
Knives slashing, letting blood
spill on rocky ground

Stygian blackness interrupted
cries of pleasure in the night
Another incorrigible sinner
sent to bathe in holy light

No more is the transgressor
allowed to walk this world
He's committed his last raping
spoiled his last little girl

Killer wipes his blade and packs
the meat of his latest kill
Anubis licks his chops and sniffs
They have done the Master's will

More meat of sinner and evil
the taste of it so sweet
Now, home to make a dinner
Fresh meat is such a treat!

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Chasse' Is a dance step In line dancing.

hugs Sis xox

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Dancing now I miss loved waltz mostly all clapped

In any dance, there are moves where
one foot is planted, and the other foot "chases"
to meet it. There are as many chasse' as there are dances
and smoothness of the move is a prerequisite.
Thanks for catching the [ess]. ~ Geez.
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I am so excited by this one I can see you stepping out *smile* with your word choices.

I have to say this is now one of my favourites of the killer series, challenge taken and you've smashed it out of the park the use of Stygian perfectly fits the theme, I am loving Killers moves, guys got moves now check it out!!! Youre building on his image filling out the blank spots and making him even more scarily real.

Big Bravo well done.

Love and higgliest bugs Sis xox

Edit;-Btw I think the title is excellent!!

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Killer has always had moves; everyone has just been blinded by his savage nature. He has "danced" his way through a few escapades. I will look up a couple of them that were born whilst you were away. Love and higgest bugs, ~ Geez.
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Kinda the original arena metal. I took my daughter a few years back. It’s a pretty family friendly event with some families sporting 3 generations of fans in macabre black tee shirts all with Eddie gracing the artwork in one of his ruined forms.

Now getting to the poem. So you know how I feel about murder and revenge, it’s poor form and not to be trifled with. Lol. I suppose even a righteous murderer is still a killer regardless of justification. The subject matter aside you’ve obviously got something good here. This reader is lost in this genre, my darkness is much more about self than interest in others so I’m short on any suggestions.

Don’t murder the messenger! Lol
Tim

"Whoever sheds the blood of man, by man shall his blood be shed,
for God made man in his own image. In Killer's tortured mind, he is an instrument of God.
~ Geez.
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I’m no stranger to it. It’s spent a lot of breath and time trying to change peoples thinking. Now I’m pretty focused on me.

Cortez the Killer “instrument of God”. There’s many brands of that foolishness. At least your killer doesn’t paint with such a broad brush. Targeting specific types of criminals for execution like “the punisher” but with loads more tact.

Tim

I've been reading your comments on this poem. (I usually do that after I read the poem) I have discovered that I cannot say it any better than Jayne has. Bravo to Killer, who has become very real to me.
dear Killer,
there is no one like you. you have your very own style and set of ethics. you live by and kill by your own standards. I am so glad that you have Anubis with you, at your side.
my favorite lines are:
Killer wipes his blade and packs
the meat of his latest kill
Anubis licks his chops and sniffs
They have done the Master's will
*always in awe, Cat
*ever impressed, eddy

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And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Someday, I will get busy and try to resurrect Killer's story, which was lost on a
corrupted thumbnail file. His story will show how and when he became Killer.
Yeah, Anubis is a much better companion than his brother Sir Gee, who continually tries to alter
his eating habits. I think that once the world sees the true Killer, it will understand.
Thanks for your unswerving loyalty to Killer and the crew; [Sir Gee and Anubis].
~ Geez.
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I felt that you would approve. Killer is a long-time resident of Neo. He has been on "Walk-about" for some time. He shows up every now and then, to make sure that no one forgets that he is an instrument of God. ~ Geez.
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This was fantastic...I actually read this to the tune of hallowed be thy name...so glad to see Killer again!

~RoseBlack~

tune for the Dance of Death. You know that Killer loves you and laughs about your favorite tale being all about shitty guitar playing! LoL
~ Geez.
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Is my person, LOL. He knows I can't stand shitty guitar playing so it is only fitting that's my favorite adventure of his! Perhaps he and I need to write one together...

~RoseBlack~

Hi, Geezer,
You are getting way too good at this. If I didn't have this huge grin, I'd be concerned. Have you always brought Anubis into Killer's world?
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is the birth of Anubis, [originally called "The Black"]
Two's Company is kind of ragged and I always have meant to go back
and smooth it out; but it does tell the tale of how Anubis came to be.
I guess that is about time to rework it and make it the piece that it can be.
Thanks for asking about Anubis, ~ Geez.
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