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Emotions In Seasons (A Loooooop Sonnet) (December Contest)

Submitted by Rula on Mon, 2022-12-26 06:05

Unlike the ice cream, summer's hot
Hot enough to let the ice-creams melt
Melt out of heat, and you shall sweat
Sweat from heat like when ice-creams melt.

I like ice-creams, unlike summers
Summers that bring the awful pests
Pests in swarms that live on the cheeks
Cheeks that no one would like to kiss.

Summers bring colourful flowers
Flowers and colours that I love
Love that you and everyone seek
Seek the beauty when summers come.

I like flowers, I like summers
Summers, flowers and ice creams.

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Last few words:

I know there's loop poetry but not sure about loooop sonnets.Lol

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Contest:

Emotions In Seasons

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Candlewitch

Mon, 2022-12-26 06:13

dear Rula,

very clever piece! hope your christmas was full of love and companionship.

*hugs, Cat

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Rula

Mon, 2022-12-26 07:05

Thank you. It's been my pleasure to know you've enjoyed my loop sonnet. Hope you didn't feel dizzy reading it all the way through.
Thank you too for your kind wishes anyways.
As a Muslim, I only celebrate two eids, Al-Fitr and Al-Adha.
Again, thank you and best wishes go to you as well dear friend.

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Candlewitch

Mon, 2022-12-26 07:18

I don't know much...

about the Muslim religion but I am willing to learn :) I am Pagan/Wiccan after having a serious fall out from the christian religion (which left scars, both physical and emotional. which is why I spend time picking apart the christian bibles (lies) in their stories. just thought I would clear that up, lol!

*love & hugs, Cat & eddy styx

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Rula

Mon, 2022-12-26 09:04

Fortunately

dear Cat, everything we need to learn nowadays becomes at our fingertips. Never lose hope to find your way.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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Candlewitch

Mon, 2022-12-26 09:14

dear Rula,

my husband just informed me that he works with several worshipers of the Muslim faith. Sam, a man I greatly admire, who works with Steven is one. and although he is now an American, keeps his faith. I can ask him if I have any questions. thanks!

*hugs, Cat

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Lavender

Mon, 2022-12-26 12:09