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Early Morning in Yosemite

Experimenting, we placed the moon
on various branches of the pines
while the morning was still very new

We considered the jealous stars above,
those not ready to depart the dawn
Amidst the chill of the Autumn air
they were invited to join us here
in our temple among the trees

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Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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One of the most beautiful places on the planet. My muse for this write.
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

the scene of the jealous stars; sitting in the bare branches of trees, next to a silver moon, which is too elegant for the company of such little twinkles. Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Thanks Geez!

Michael Anthony

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Hello, Michael,
As I read this, I feel such peace. Thank you for bringing me here!
L

Thanks for joining in on the journey L!

Best

Michael Anthony

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Indeed! Really nice job.

Tim

Glad you enjoyed this one RA - thank you!

Best

Michael Anthony

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