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LET IT RAIN WITHIN

Submitted by lovedly on Mon, 2022-08-15 15:21

Well when it rains
it brings fortune
it reigns all over
in harmony and tune

let the spurt come again
soon
Ah it rains again
for me and you

perhaps your hands will now be
clamped by your beau

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
LIGHTER VEIN OF rain
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Chiori

Mon, 2022-08-15 18:51

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I believe you are also experiencing massive downpour over there, for days now we have not seen the sun, who now his whereabouts, but my clothes lying there just waiting for the sun

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

Lavender

Tue, 2022-08-16 23:17

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Hi, Lovedly!
Catchy play on words! Refreshing and sweet!
Thank you,
L

lovedly

Wed, 2022-08-17 12:16

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may be able to spend rainy times fishing/angling thanks for the sweetness
fish we love when salty lol

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