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Gifts
She was melancholy
because our puppy lifted his leg to pee tonight
"It makes him seem so grown up now", she had said
This made me think about her gifts
How they are not always in plain sight,
just below the surface of the words,
and how lucky I was to have someone
to help me remember to see them
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Free verse
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Sometimes, the gifts are just below the surface of the words.
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San Francisco Bay Area - USA
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Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)
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Candlewitch
Mon, 2022-07-25 11:09
dear Michael,
she, is very wise.
(as you are observant)
*hugs, Cat
*
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Michael Anthony
Mon, 2022-07-25 11:22
Thanks CW! Just edited the
Thanks CW! Just edited the second stanza. Seemed like a line from my comments fit there too. Appreciate your visits.
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Michael Anthony
author commentGeezer
Mon, 2022-07-25 15:16
A rare insight...
into a relationship that not everyone will see or appreciate. How lucky you are! This is a gem. ~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony
Wed, 2022-07-27 15:53
Thanks as always Geez!
Thanks as always Geez! Believe me, this fool knows how lucky he is!
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Michael Anthony
author commentRosewood Apothecary
Mon, 2022-07-25 15:55
Really good
These little interactions. Entire universes are created by the depth of love you’re conveying here. I became teary reading it. Sometimes the most seemingly mundane statement says “I love you from a place I can’t begin to understand”. Without a bunch of over sharing, what you’ve written really had a very strong emotional effect on me.
Thank you,
Tim
Michael Anthony
Wed, 2022-07-27 15:58
Thank you Tim! And thank you
Thank you Tim! And thank you for sharing your thoughts on this piece. Really like your “I love you from a place I can’t begin to understand" comment. Always a tricky balance to write about love and not be cloying or trite since sooo much has already been written on the topic. Glad you liked this one.
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Michael Anthony
author commentCandlewitch
Wed, 2022-07-27 16:45
dear Michael,
the best "love poems" never include the word (love) for some reason "love" has become a cleche' and a thing of toxic waste for valentines and teens.
*hugs, Cat
*
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And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.