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The fiery fluttering phoenix

Submitted by Edward nigma on Sun, 2022-07-24 12:06

A fiery phoenix
freely
fluttering
It’s withering
white wings
of innocence
amongst the
sullen silken air .
preparing
to shed away
all worldly
cares and cries
as it repeatedly
replies with the
gallant guiltless
guild of
goodbyes.

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Rosewood Apothecary

Sun, 2022-07-24 13:20

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I absolutely adore alliteration. Lol.

as it repeatedly
replies with the
gallant guiltless
guild of
goodbyes.

That’s really good,
Tim

Edward nigma

Sun, 2022-07-24 13:57

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When I do alliteration in poetry I usually alliterate 1 or two letters
In order for it to have a good flow anything more than two it would too convoluted and lose its flow. Like for example

The hectic humdrum hound
with his cynical snout
solemnly sneering
at the ground .

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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