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About You...

About You...

something in the way

you take my hand

caress my cheek

gaze into my eyes

breathe my name

kiss my throat

fondle my nape...

we undulate

oscillate

modulate

tangled limbs

of a work in progress

Something about you causes

my mouth to dry

breath to catch

pulse to race

body to sing...

The chorus

of the music of our souls

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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The story told is a one of love and unity with another. Excellent pace and word usage. ~ Geez.
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I'm listening to the guess who right now...
thank you for always being supportive of my work! you are a true friend!

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I love the title.
The poem is about two lovers that felt the warmth of their bodies when they were together.

"Words are currency of ideas and have the power to change world. Ride your pen on the rough road."

you are right.

always, Cat

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It’s great. I’m late getting on tonight. But yeah!!

you don't mean to tell me, that you have a life outside of Neopoet? lol

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The title, the flow, the story...all wonderful!

~RoseBlack~

thank you RoseB. I appreciate your reading and commenting :)

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and erotic love verse. Generally short and graceful in form and typically dealing with themes of love and affection.

Beautifully penned piece!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

I appreciate your comments!

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This reminded me of two souls dancing around each other an attracted like magnets. I think it is an absolute cracking poem. I love the title it suits the poem. I think this would make for some amazing lyrics!!!

Yep I went back in time again

Brava!!!

Love you always Lilbit xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

thank you for the sweetness in your comment. I always appreciate you because you are so kind.

*Love & hugs, Siscat

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this write manages to be sexual without being carnal. Well done

you always see the good in everyone. it is a rare talent that you have! thank you,

*love, Cat

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