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WDYDTTM

Why do you do this to me
Come back into my life and tear me down
You're like a drug I can't get off of
Why do you do this to me
Come back and mess with my mind
Until I can't think straight
Why do you do this to me
Come back and make me feel special
I'm not special to you
So why do you do this to me
Because you want to play with me like I'm your little toy
Well I'm not your little toy anymore
When you come back I'll be there waiting to tear you down

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WHAT IS THIS TITLE i'M SURE THE LETTERS STAND FOR SOMETHING ONLY YOU KNOW ,SO HOW CAN YOU EXPECT OTHERS TO UNDERSTAND IT? also YOUR POEM IS MORE THAN A RANT THAN A POEM WHERE IS THE STRUCTURE? WHERE IS IT GOING?

Chrys

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Thank you for your comment the title of the poem is in the first line of the poem. The poem is expressing how I was feeling at that moment, I was not trying to have it come off as a rant. The structure for me was a free write, thank you for your critique.

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i really like this line:

When you come back I'll be there waiting to tear you down

that would be great if you can turn the tables on your foe! I say foe, because he is an enemy. some people get off on hurting others. they aren't happy unless they have the upper hand. I know what you mean, as I've been in your shoes. good luck!

*hugs, Cat

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