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Take Me To the Otherside
Take me to the other side
where my brighter future
as you all now say lies
I have reached the zenith
which height that
none can relay
I take it as
MOUNT EVEREST
many reached the top
I can now only fly over it
just send a 'copter to me
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
scribbler
Mon, 2022-05-16 22:26
hi loved
We get to that other side soon enough. All say......none can say ? i think you need to work on these two lines a bit
lovedly
Mon, 2022-05-16 22:59
Moderated stan
any better
or
should I scrap it
Candlewitch
Tue, 2022-05-17 10:15
dear lovedly,
NO!!! don't scrap it! I hope we both have a pleasant and easy landing after the thrill of soaring over the heights!
*love, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
lovedly
Tue, 2022-05-17 14:02
Kindness for the support
O Cats