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My Daughter

Submitted by Zengoddess on Tue, 2022-05-10 06:36

My daughter,
I don't want you to be perfect
I just want you to be you.
Be proud and love yourself
and only then, I'll love you too.
A lot of beauties in the world,
but none of them are good as you.
Be virtuous and be wise
and to your very self, be true

My daughter,
The world is ugly and full of hate,
show the beauty and love in you.
The world is broken and full of pain,
give your smile and the joy in you.
I raised a jewel, costlier than diamond,
my greatest achievement is having you.
Be confident and proud,
I'll gladly give my life for you.

Style / type:

Free verse

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Candlewitch

Tue, 2022-05-10 07:06

hello,

it is very nice to meet you. welcome to the home of Neopoet! my name is Cat. may I suggest a title change of,( "To My Darling Daughter" or "Dear Daughter", as you are addressing the poem to her.)
this poem is full of love, observations and enlightened instruction. my favorite lines are:

give your smile and the joy in you.
I raised a jewel, costlier than diamond,
my greatest achievement is having you.

this poem was a pleasure to read. I hope to see more of you work!

*hugs, Cat

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Zengoddess

Tue, 2022-05-10 10:56