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Shamed Cop

Sainted thief
Salute!
Thieving saint
Decorated.

When a palm frond made for shade
Is burnt to ashes,
Not even skeletons can mask his beauty.

When a parliament gives you an award,
Be certain of a visit from ant-infested woods.

When a Cardinal fresh from conclave,
Frolics in hideous huts,
Broken kernels will adorn his neck.

What sort of medal was he expecting?
Like David's who slew tens of thousands?

You became transfixed in soured grapes -
Fresh from hallowed chambers,
All in shades of intent.

Corrupted by the palm wine they gave you:
High and tipsy in your jubilation of robbery;
A dreaded hunter shadowed to a dingy cell.
In torrents of shame
Prancing about on
Rancid banana peels

Greed has coloured the medal
Adorning your shadow's neck,
Like a canvas
In mixture of blood
Of victims' pains.

I wonder what runs through your mind
In the chambers of prison.

Last few words: 
How has the mighty fallen, from grace to grass. The poem is a depiction of a certain super cop, who was renowned for his heroics in crime bursting of dreaded and notorious criminals in the country. He received numerous awards from all corners, including national recognition. He ended up enmeshed in criminality and was recently caught and in detention. Crime does not pay.
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

When a parliament of baboons gives you an award,
Be certain of a visit from ant-infested(faggots.)
Extremely Disparaging and Offensive. a contemptuous term used to refer to a gay person, especially a gay man.

this line makes no sense: "All in Halloween of intent." to me, a wiccan, Halloween is a religious holiday. it has been warped into a night that children go from house to beg candy and other treats.

High and tipsy in your "highness" of robbery;
A dreaded hunter shadowed to a dingy cell.
"tipsy and bold in your (jubilation) of robbery"

In (torrents) of shame prancing (try using: another word)
(On banana peels.
Costumed,
Yellow on the outside
Black on the inside) get rid of this and say: rancid banana peels

I wonder what runs (in) your mind (through)

your title is okay. the topic is good. but you need a better (whatever your language is to English translator) and a good dictionary/thesaurus and a better understanding of the rules of Grammar. this poem is a good start.

*hugs, Cat

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Thank you Cat for your critique to make this a better poem.

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your corrections have made this a much better poem. it reads more smoothly now. thank you for using my suggestions. have a glorious day!

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

I'm glad the poem appeals to you. Hoping it does to others. We keep getting better with each other.
Thanks again.

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The work to me portrays current political situation of the country Nigeria
When a parliament of baboons gives you an award,
Be certain of a visit from ant-infested faggots

and i think i understand your dictions better

Thanks

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

Yes, it resonates well with all who are abreast of affairs in Nigeria.
Thank you for reaching out.
Regards.

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