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"Fear Is The Mind Killer"
"Fear Is The Mind Killer"
in this fragile body
beats the heart of a lion
with a cunning mind,
I am very much alive.
YOU on the other hand are
without the courage
of your convictions
you mam are a coward!
I smell the fear on you
come near me
and I will show you,
catch hold of you
while you beat yourself
against the furniture
trying to loose my clutch
and get away from me!
it was said in "Dune"
*"fear is the mind killer
the little death"
*"Dune", by Frank Herbert
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Geezer
Fri, 2022-04-15 11:38
I agree...
"Fear is the mind killer." Your title is strong, it makes you want to know, 'what is the mind killer?'
Your language is good, no doubts of what is being said.
I think that one could almost believe that there is a sub-story here. Something to do with having a seizure.
I know someone who is caught in the grip of always fearing what could happen, and they also have an occasional
seizure. Nothing severe, but they worry about having one in front of people and being embarrassed!
I have often told them, that they may be bringing on a seizure by being so worried about it, and not to worry about things that might happen, because they are suffering the fright of them twice! Your presentation works well, with a smooth pace that runs a good theme from start to finish very nicely. ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch
Sat, 2022-04-16 05:58
dear Geezer,
after it was all over, I had the fear that I might have caused irreparable harm especially with my sister, she was 4 and 1/2 years older than me and she fought with her fists (Idid, too) the oldest sister was a coward.She was 6 years older than me. she would try to intimidate me with her screechy LOUD voice all the while calling for our mother's help. I one the other hand got a sound in my voice that was deep and menacing. (Steve has hear it sometimes when we argue...he says it makes his blood run cold. when Kathryn heard the voice, she started screaming. then I would grab hold of her arm and just hold on hard...she would panic and try to get away thus harming herself.
I am old and frail of body, now, and if she yet lived, I could scare the crap out of her with just my voice.
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author commentlovedly
Fri, 2022-04-15 21:40
Firstly the person(s) must be sure they have a brain
and don't rely on hearsay
Then they must also know
cowards die many times
so they must drink red wine
to have some kinda mind
Cats I c u
come up with creativity
Do you think
I have one
what
mind
Gee may not agree
and
stan will say
LOL lovedly
Candlewitch
Sat, 2022-04-16 06:01
dear lovedly,
yes...you have a beautiful mind!
*hugs, Cat
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author commentJackweb
Sat, 2022-04-16 01:18
Beautiful
Excellent composition. You have displayed your poetic proficiency here. I love the poem. The title is well fitted. Nice piece.
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Candlewitch
Sat, 2022-04-16 06:04
dear onyinyechi,
thank you. you make me smile because you always have something pleasant to say!
*hugs, Cat
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author commentJackweb
Sat, 2022-04-16 14:48
Welcome
Good works deserves good appreciations
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Candlewitch
Sat, 2022-04-16 17:37
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author commentRay Whitaker
Sat, 2022-04-16 10:02
I am glad I am not the person
that your wrath is directed at. This piece is full of that, the images are quite good.
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Candlewitch
Sat, 2022-04-16 10:27
thank you Ray,
for both reading and commenting. you let me know that I am effective! I appreciate you.
*hugs, Cat
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author commentRosewood Apothecary
Wed, 2022-12-07 13:52
Ah! The Litany Against Fear
“I must not fear.
fear is the mind-killer.
fear is the little-death that brings total obliteration.
I will face my fear.
I will permit it to pass over me and through me.
And when it has gone past I will turn the inner eye to see its path.
Where the fear has gone there will be nothing.
Only I will remain”
Paul Atreides (Muad Dib) from
Frank Hebert’s classic Dune.
Always a favorite of mine
Tim
Candlewitch
Wed, 2022-12-07 14:57
;)
mine too,
*hugs, Cat
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author commentRoseBlack
Wed, 2022-12-07 18:59
Fear certainly is a killer
Glad it wasn't me you were angry at!
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-12-08 04:46
dear Carrie,
thank you for your support in my writing. it is appreciated ;)
*hugs, Cat
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