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A flamboyant flower

A flamboyant flower
taunts and
towers .
Over every
clever
clean green
clover .
That is left
to shrivel
itself away
within the
senescent
shadows
of solemn
senile shrubs.

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Not Explicit Content

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snakes its way through this entire poem! I thoroughly enjoyed this! ~ Geez.
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And I thoroughly enjoy your company.

Alliteration I use or alliterate one letter so it doesn’t get convoluted and it will have a nice flow.

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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within the
senescent
shadows
of solemn
senile shrubs.

sounds like a get-together-dinner with my family!

*hugs, Cat

p.s.
I hope you are well

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Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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IMO a large improvement! Nice work!

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Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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