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BRILLIANCE OF HUMAN ......neopoets edit .......
Can be discernible
from the quality of content
and the poetic intent
in the slightest use of cement
when the likes of you need
to vociferous comment
do not rant
this to you all I grant
my mind often runs at a slant
like an egg plant
but discern it you can't
as you have a mind
without a planned plant
so simply with me chant
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Candlewitch
Mon, 2022-04-11 07:23
dear lovedly,
section one, last line: I would change vociferously to: (vociferous)
*hugs, Cat
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Geezer
Mon, 2022-04-11 08:58
Do you...
mean that there are those that just go along with the crowd? Not understanding, but feeling like they have to say something, say what the rest are saying? I know a lot of people like that. That is just human nature, not wanting to feel left out, many times, people don't bother to take the time to question what they hear or want to spend the time learning about things. That's okay, we soon learn who those people are and what their motives are. As long as they are not being malicious, it doesn't bother me. You are an enigma; most don't understand what you say or take the time to decipher your ramblings. [Which I don't believe are ramblings at all]. ~ Geez.
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lovedly
Mon, 2022-04-11 10:40
GEE
It just came to my mind reading poems one too many why rant and now as you say ramble You have a polite way to tick me off in your inimitable way.... Say what you want to really say....my mind is saturated today.
What about vociferous you say?
Jackweb
Mon, 2022-04-11 10:43
Brilliant flash
As Cat pointed out, 'vociferously' here should be vociferous hence it is referring to a person which makes the adjective fitted in the line. Vociferously is the adverb!
Thanks!
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
lovedly
Mon, 2022-04-11 11:05
thanks may rethink
to vociferously comment
or
to vociferous comment ???
or
to a vociferous comment ??
bit confusing
Jackweb
Mon, 2022-04-11 11:14
Suitable
Is: to vociferous comment
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Jackweb
Mon, 2022-04-11 11:14
Suitable
Is: to vociferous comment
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb