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BITTER SWEET

Submitted by lovedly on Tue, 2022-03-29 20:06

The sweet ones
who comment sweetly
are hardly any
as the world proceeds on
such beautiful ones are also gone

The hardness prevails
as all know
one day those
unwanted ones
will also go
yeah
they damn well know

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Tue, 2022-03-29 22:27

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We have to believe that that someday will come. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

lovedly

Tue, 2022-03-29 23:22

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but of course as I always say
life is controlled by
GENES
ENVIRONMENT
AND
CIRCUMSTANCE
ALL IS A MATTER OF TIME
Thanks friend you r kind

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Candlewitch

Wed, 2022-03-30 07:34

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I wish the bad ones would get bored and leave a little bit sooner. I perceive that you feel strongly about this! I do too ;)

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

lovedly

Wed, 2022-03-30 11:51

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yes
as Simon says in auditions
we need a third yes
hello Gee
yes yes yes

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