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To Feel Alive

My heart beating a million miles a minute
Every pore releasing anxiety
Backing from the ledge slowly
My feet, feeling every blade of grass
Every rock, stick, and leaf
My knees, about to buckle
My breath, fluttering with the breeze
Every voice in my head, screaming
Running as if my feet shouldn't touch the ground

Then, there was nothing

Wind hitting my face
My hair flying behind me
The water below hits me like a brick
The pain quickly fades as a wave rushes over

A blue shimmer above me
The black abyss below me
Feeling the cold pressure surround me
My heart beating a million miles a minute

I can finally breathe

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction): 
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

I really liked this. The imagery was great. Thanks for sharing. Love and light. Namaste

Love and light. Namaste.

Thank you for reading my work!

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Falling, flailing.... the sky holds no-one without a propeller. are you portraying jumping off a bridge?

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This was about cliff jumping. Thank you for taking the time to read my work!

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