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To Feel Alive
My heart beating a million miles a minute
Every pore releasing anxiety
Backing from the ledge slowly
My feet, feeling every blade of grass
Every rock, stick, and leaf
My knees, about to buckle
My breath, fluttering with the breeze
Every voice in my head, screaming
Running as if my feet shouldn't touch the ground
Then, there was nothing
Wind hitting my face
My hair flying behind me
The water below hits me like a brick
The pain quickly fades as a wave rushes over
A blue shimmer above me
The black abyss below me
Feeling the cold pressure surround me
My heart beating a million miles a minute
I can finally breathe
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction):
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Tracey Underwood
Wed, 2022-03-02 17:05
Your poem
I really liked this. The imagery was great. Thanks for sharing. Love and light. Namaste
Love and light. Namaste.
Nanni
Thu, 2022-03-10 12:29
Thank you for reading my work
Thank you for reading my work!
Ray Whitaker
Sat, 2022-03-05 16:12
Welcome to the website!
Falling, flailing.... the sky holds no-one without a propeller. are you portraying jumping off a bridge?
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Nanni
Thu, 2022-03-10 12:29
This was about cliff jumping.
This was about cliff jumping. Thank you for taking the time to read my work!