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Quiet Love
The difference creates monotony.
But, how can one speak if his eyes are closed?
Am i, or, I am ?
So?
That words do not sound dead to me.
After all, worlds of people, quiet.
Am I then wrong?
That the love,
is just me but,
Quiet ?
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Geezer
Thu, 2022-02-10 08:40
This is...
quite enigmatic, and I am not quite sure of how to read this. Perhaps I do not see or hear what you say, maybe it is the quiet
that confuses me. Being blind in the ears may be my problem. A little help might be in order. ~ Geezer.
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Ray Whitaker
Thu, 2022-02-10 12:17
WELCOME to the website!
I would like to encourage you to continue to post your work here. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Introspective, this piece is. Very close to an interrogation of the self. The questioning is sincere, however what is left for the read to question?
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