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the thorough thinker

Submitted by Edward nigma on Sat, 2021-12-25 18:28

The thorough thinker
opened his
mouth and thrust
his bold blade
of belittlement
deep into
my heavy heart of hope.
Slashing it’s
way into the sulking
sands of
cynicism .

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My inspiration is the play cyrano de bergerac it’s hard to think because my head these past two days has been killing me so forgive me for the stanzas i’ve been writing a story when i can think or am not hurting so much.
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Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Triskelion

Sat, 2021-12-25 19:39

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sounds like a stinker.
I like the way your poems remind me of Theodore Geisel Suess' writing.

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

Edward nigma

Sat, 2021-12-25 21:25

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I like his rhyming and alliteration

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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Edward nigma

Sun, 2021-12-26 10:34

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I was inspired by Cyrano de Bergerac
https://youtu.be/3V9GN0x17DM
and thank you for your kind words of consideration
my dear friend may you also be well in this wild world of the enigma.

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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Geezer

Sun, 2021-12-26 13:24

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for your pain. Sounds like a little bit of self-doubt trying to make its' way into your head; I would venture to say that might be part of your pain. Only crit. is the [ed] on thrusted. No need for it, thrust is one of those odd words that does well without the past-tense spelling out. ~ Geez.
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Edward nigma

Sun, 2021-12-26 16:44

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and i hope your doing well
i’m going to fix the word

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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Jackweb

Mon, 2021-12-27 12:32

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It's truly deep-cutting, a melancholic expression.

Well expressed.

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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