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ARRGGHH! She's gonna have to go !!

A POX !! -- A POX !!!
upon the man
that flogged my wife
this camper van,
and told her "please don't
worry dear
that damp patch here
is nothing queer,
it's merely steam
and condensate
that's dripping on your
empty pate"...

Obi.

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Not Explicit Content

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all the lines about making assumptions; I'm going to do just that. I am assuming that your wife bought a campervan, and she got cheated. I will also assume that the empty plate you write about, is the empty pockets that resulted from the buying. At any rate, the story is interesting enough to keep one reading and speculating. ~ Geez.
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The Wife,,,, (Buggered off years ago)
The "Empty Pate",,, (Her vacuous head)

The Empty pockets,,, (Mine)

Hiya, Geeez!!

Obi.

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the pate as plate. LoL
~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Pate is a new one on me. Enjoyed this one!

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

..but I have to throw this out there. I wonder what this would read like if you changed two words ie...flogged to shagged and "on" your empty pate to "from" your empty pate.

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

You've met the ex wife then!

Obi.

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