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A star with a scar

Submitted by Edward nigma on Mon, 2021-11-29 16:55

A star with
a scar
lead out of
the light.
Longs for
love yet
nurtures
the night .

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My inspiration was sunset boulevard I’m sorry for my absence but it’s hard to think recently I’ve had two bran surgeries they had to put a bur hole up which is you drill a hole in the skull and they discovered my shunt was over draining and then I had brain surgery. It’s hard to write because it’s hard for me to think.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Ray Whitaker

Mon, 2021-11-29 21:44

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Glad to hearths you are coming thru your healthcare struggles!

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Geezer

Tue, 2021-11-30 00:26

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you back and writing. I agree, short sentences, keeping the thoughts focused, will help you come back. Nice job so far. ~ Geez.
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large marge

Tue, 2021-11-30 14:54

I love a well done concise poem. This one reminds me of my favorite Joni Mitchell song

Edward nigma

Tue, 2021-11-30 16:47

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my inspiration was
this scene from the movie sunset boulevard
https://youtu.be/jMTT0LW0M_Y

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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