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When lights go out come again

When lights go out come again
think of me

a lonely bird flying sky high
am I the eagle you are in search

come to me when the lights go off
comfort me more than yourself

many told me today
they read me I'm good

but they leave no comments
lest I burst

they know not the time of travel
to the invisible universe
eternity
infinity

written in the language of the galaxy
even day light cannot change it
so abide with me
when the real time comes
no one will be showing the path unwritten

so burn your egos
read all poetry
of Neo

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
This is in first person only NO SELF PRAISE as one brands me
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Yes, we all want to be remembered! There are those of us that will, and those of us that won't! I do believe that you have got a good one here Lovedly; [as long as it isn't self-praise/ego]. 'Cause if I find out .... LoL ~ Geez.
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Thanks finally many like you know me jess always kicked me then held me like a football no self goal thanks i have been here like stan longest less owing to techy mistakes hence different names

author comment

Really like how and where you took this.

The last three lines while complementary of Neopoet, (well deserved of course!) seem out of place to me…. Really really like the poem without those lines.

‘Course this is just my opinion…

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read w/o......

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