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Peach Poem Recipe November Contest

I envy the prolific poet
who can whip up a delicious dish
of twenty lines (or less)
and present it
like a perfect peach pie;
warm, topped with ice cream.

Words woven in an intricate lattice;
buttery, they melt on my tongue;
taste buds tantalized by the
succulent, brown-sugared mound
of fresh fruit imagery, juicy
and lovingly intermingled

with spicy consonance & assonance;
the phrases sliced at a slant,
until my senses succumb to the glory
of its peachy perfection.
I savor a sliver, let it slip slowly down;
ask for seconds.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

I went from not caring at all about having something to eat; [I just had breakfast a while ago]; to wanting a piece of that delicious peach pie that you have described! Nice work! ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

But all you younger poets
don't read oldies
all know it g

eneration's weave

Careful now!
We may have to put you on a diet.

Obi.

Wonderful write denalisa! I'm going to look for another slice of your work!

Cheers

Michael Anthony

Very nice, left me with a strong feeling about the envied poet’s work. A really nice tribute to the poet whos work is compared to a tasty pie…

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