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Give and Take

I don't care to let anyone in
because then they know
just where you have been

You are a people collector
a hoarder of souls
i think you know
you need to let them go

You gather them
as you would bees in a jar
or like postcards held
in cellophaned pages

You'll have to let them be
open the lid
rip out a leaf

people crave for a time
a bit of their own
to spend on themselves
to share with a friend

Last few words: 
it's ok to be critical it's a two way street.
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

I agree, punctuation is helpful and would be welcome here. Critique is only as good as the spirit as it is delivered in and the effect of change to the end result. ~ Geezer.
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