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A Beautiful Boy
On the beach within easy reach
all were enjoying a lovely son
even he was having fun ~~boy's dilemma
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Ray Whitaker
Sat, 2021-09-18 19:12
Good start…
Could you be moving into a legnthy piece in three line form with this?
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lovedly
Sat, 2021-09-18 22:53
not really
this is abs imagery
a guy was simply surrounded by younger gals
wanting to buy lips sticks
or
perhaps negligees
this just struck my mind
what a lucky sweet guy
just maybe17 plus
more beautifuller than gals
enjoying aroma at their expense
lol
Ray do you fish
lovedly
Sat, 2021-09-18 22:57
cee
On the beach within easy reach
all were enjoying a lovely son
even he was having fun ~~boy's dilemma
this is abs imagery
a guy was simply surrounded by younger gals
wanting to buy lips sticks
perhaps negligees
this just struck my mind
what a lucky sweet guy
maybe just 17 plus
beautifuller than all gals
enjoying aroma at their expense
Ray Whitaker
Sun, 2021-09-19 10:47
No, don’t fish
Not for years… however was a good fisher in my younger years. Eat ‘em tho…
I like the revision a lot!
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lovedly
Sun, 2021-09-19 12:49
thank you
do read the refreshed