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Delightful Dancing Dignitaries

Delightful dancing dolphins dip, douse
their dorsal
Elegant elephant’s elongated ears ebb
Little lambs leaping lilies laughingly
Lindy
Iconic impala ignites Irish improv
Graceful gazelle’s galloping gullies to
grapevine
Hallelujah hippopotamus hula hoops
Trashing trouts twist to turn the tide to
twirl tango
Furry fennec fox fabulously floss
foxtrots
Utopian unicorn unties umbrellas
Lazy lizards lasso’s liscio lips

Daring dalmatian dog delivers dab
disco
Aggressive alligator aids awki awki
Naughty nocturnal natterjacks nods
nutbrushes
Cascading centipede circles can-can
cakewalk
Inactive icy ibisbills inch innaby
Nostril nurse-shark nocturnally
nizamikos
Glorious gorillas greet gliding and
grinding

Delicate dar dragonfly discos
dirty
Icky inchworm intentionally Israeli
Ginger giraffes grandiose go
ganggangsullae
Noticeable narwhal navigates
nabichum
Indian-scissor-bill incisors indlamu
Talkative toco toucan twists and
taps tango
Astonishing African aardvark Atlanta
Rhinoceros rock and roll the red river
jig
Isotopes isoptera inks Irish-step-dance
Elusive emus enjoys the electric-slide
Stylish seahorses slowly swing, strip and
square step

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AUTHOR’s NOTES

Title: Delightful Dancing Dignitaries © Rickey L Bennett 2021
WC: 157

SC: 12 / Line

Photo Curtesy of:

http://dark-horse-adaptations.blogspot.com/2013/01/funny-animals-dancing...

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Comments

What I am seeing here are beautiful examples of alliteration ,however I am not finding anything cohesive about the lines

Chrys

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is meant to be part of the Sept. contest, find the box to check and make sure that it is entered properly. I do see the thread of continuity, but only because I see the title says something about dancing and most of the lines have a bit to do with dancing moves, but not all. ~ Geezer.
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Hi Rickey, clever poem. My view is that so many alliterations make it more like a tongue twister. Still, if that is your intention, let it be.

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