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Your Love

Your love
I seek
you are mine
within reach
searching you
on every beach
come love me
I'm within reach''

SEARCHING INSTEAD OF SEEKING HOWZ IT NOW STAN AND GEE

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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think on it, it's too early to get philosophical! ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

keep clicking ur CLOCK
GEE

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Line 5 is kinda off to me. Maybe change search to seeking? Otherwise enjoyable

did you review

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there is nothing philosophical about it after-all. You're just a horny old goat! Yes, trade search for seeking, feels better that way. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

with you and stan coz u both are masters but give it a second thought as UNREQUITED LOVE NOT HORNY passing time composed this when I WAS what you say GEE
horror knee
yesterday I LOST MY PW today I have noted somewhere HAPPY DAY

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I see the unrequited love part, and yes, it sounds better. Sorry, didn't mean to be flip with my critique. Short and sweet, I see you on the beach, lounging on a blanket, sipping a cool drink with your dark shades and roaming eyes. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

if only

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