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My Flowery Youth...(Edited by Gee)
Youth is a fountain
which must one day dry
Within our aging skin
and beneath balding hair
our hearts can remain youthful
In our aged dreams
we can water youthful hearts
the youngster still remains
and needs only memories to feed on
Pause; a comma, is not a coma
if our lonely hearts are still strong
Oh youth, do not flee
be free, be free
Take me, take me
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Sat, 2021-07-24 12:42
My take on this one...
Youth is a fountain
which must one day dry
Within our aging skin
and beneath balding hair
our hearts can remain youthful
There is more, but I leave it to you to figure it out.
The rest:
In our aged dreams
we can water youthful hearts
the youngster still remains
and needs only memories to feed on
Pause; a comma, is not a coma
if our lonely hearts are still strong
Oh youth, do not flee
be free, be free
Take me, take me
~ Geez.
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lovedly
Fri, 2021-07-23 12:07
Gee
That's nice thanks
sos
kindly d the rest my old poem
'twas
lovedly
Sat, 2021-07-24 22:53
just excellent now Gee AND HERE TIS CHEERS TO NEOS
in your youth you would have been heartthrob of many lol you are free Geeeeee
Youth is a fountain
which must one day dry
Within our aging skin
and beneath balding hair
our hearts can remain youthful
In our aged dreams
we can water youthful hearts
the youngster still remains
and needs only memories to feed on
Pause; a comma, is not a coma
if our lonely hearts are still strong
Oh youth, do not flee
be free, be free
Take me, take me
~ Geez.
Geezer
Sun, 2021-07-25 10:05
So glad that...
you liked what I did, you put it all together well. ~ Geez.
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lovedly
Sun, 2021-07-25 13:04
thx Gee
I will replace it if you agree up to ye
Geezer
Mon, 2021-07-26 08:47
It's your work...
do as you will with it. I just tried to help out, I didn't write it. ~ Geez.
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