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Eros.

I am the most powerful in the realms of time and of no time.

I exist purely by necessity, yet I am abstract.

Sweeter than mangoes I am, but I will warn, I can taste like a lime.

He, who also exist by necessity, was thrashed, disparaged, and sortied; this was no act.

Because, when a man learns to love he must also bear the risk of hatred; so, for me, he died.

You, yes you, cannot hide from me, and you cannot find me.

For I am not something you find, I am something that finds you, no lie.

If you wish to see me imagine a rock hugged by the sea.

Oh, how I make the heart heavy enough to sink a soul.

If they think they fathom my brain.

They are the strong who fall into the dark, desperate hole.

Oh, I fear this is when all beings in the realms of time and of no time open the dos gate of rain.

For a man cries not because he is weak, but because he has been strong for too long.

I shall extract your mask of my face that fits like that of a glove.

Careful, don't bite your rosy tongue.

Unfurl your heart and see now that it is I who resides within you, Love.

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Comments

Quite a few poetic stand-out phrases here, Josiah.

here is my favourite pic.

Don't bite your rosy tongue.
Unfurl your heart,
See that it is I who resides within you,

obi

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