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Aussieland is Calling...

I'd like to live down-under
In Aussieland by the sea
With wallabies and waves of thunder
And Eucalyptus trees

The Outback filled with the songs
Of Kookaburra birds
And frog-filled billabongs
Grasslands and kangaroo herds

I'd listen through the night
To Aboriginal didgeridoos
Watch the sun come up bright
Look for spiders in my shoes

Ahhhh, the call of the wild
The Outback calling me
Me, a nature-child
A regular Croc Dundee

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I was wondering; would it be better if I said in the first stanza: Australia, instead of Aussieland? ~ Geez.
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seems more formal than Aussieland. I like the friendly flair of Aussieland more. It's a fine poem with it's light-hearted appeal. Nicely done!

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

The informal light-hearted approach is definitely what I am going for. My Aussie friends are pleased with my work and say that I hit it right on! ~ Geez.
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"Aussieland", every time, and I would advocate more colloquiums,
more earthy, in your face Australian couldn't care less language.
this is really good, worth working on.

Obi.

I kinda want to keep it like it is, to keep the "average reader", [not an Aussie] from tripping over themselves in trying to understand colloquiums. This is easy for the everyday reader to understand, with just basic knowledge of Australia. ~ Geez.
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Give it more a state of mind feeling I think. BTW congrats on the win

Going to Australia is on my bucket-list. Unfortunately, I will probably 'kick' the bucket before that happens unless I win the lottery. LoL
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Fun read - well done!

Michael Anthony

I had lots of fun writing this one. ~ Geez.
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I have never heard the term "Aussieland" in my many visits to Australia.
I think "Ozzieland", "the Land of Oz" or even just plain "Oz" would be better and more Australian They also like "Godzone country" !!!

PS: "Aussie" is always pronouncied "Ozzie"!

PPS These PC/woke days "aborigine" is regarded as patronising and even offensive to some ...the US equivalent might be "red indian"...

Sorry to butt in here but Our Chant is Aussie Aussie Aussie oi oi oi and Ozzie to me being an Australian is a character here. I use Oz as in my country but I am Aussie. I live in town with a massive Koori/Aboriginal population and I've never heard of people of Aboriginal origin being offended at being called that. My cousin is half Koori and my niece is also among a heap of other family. My next door neighbour is Koori as well. In my neighbourhood there are tons. Having a lot of friends who're Koori I was curious who told you this. It's a misconception. Maybe somewhere someone is offended by being called that but not in any of the communities I know of. Most of the Koori organisations have Aboriginal in their title. Hope you aren't offended by my addressing this. I do it with good intent.

Kindest regards Jayne.

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

I bow to your local knowledge. However, please note the following article:

https://www.abc.net.au/news/2011-12-15/dillon---political-correctness3a-...

PS. How would you pronounce "Aussie"? (with a zz or an ss?)

Best wishes

L.

One day we are going to bring you here. Congratulations on the win I am so over the moon for you. I love your poem as it is. It's so nice to be back among my family again.. I've missed this.

Bravo take a bow.

Love and higgliest bugs Jayne xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

before I kick the bucket
before there I land
ru coming Gee
hand in hand
lol

Long as you can buy your own ticket, you can come. ~ Geez.
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Congratulations Bro I am so happy you won. You deserve it. I'm so happy for you!!!

Love & higgliest bugs your Aussie Sis. <3<3

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Sis, it's on my bucket list!
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that voted for my poem. It means the world to me, that I wrote something that made so many of you feel is worthy of the honor of Poem Of the Year. ~ Geezer.
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FROM DOWN UNDER ME
NO TICKET NEEDED
SENT BY JESS HAA NOT FREE

The poem is creatively crafted with a blend of imagery and invoking vocabulary a deep thoughts in readers mind.

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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I thought it was awesome . I read a book by Marlo Morgan i
n which she went on a walkabout with the aborigines. It's a cool book
Great poem, it rang true with what I know!.You would really like it!

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

I thought it was awesome . I read a book by Marlo Morgan
in which she went on a walkabout with the aborigines. It's a cool book
Great poem, it rang true with what I know!.You would really like it!

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

Please go easy on that enter button. ~ Geez.
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With our love we can save the world. - George Harrison

The fact that we've never met. But the love lives here in this place, amongst you beautiful souls. Oh oh oh I think I have a poem ruminating.

I love you big bro. Higgliest bugs xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

to see you! I hope you are recovering well. It pains me to think that my sis is having health problems again. I miss seeing you around. Hope you post one soon. ~ Geez.
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