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AN ANGEL'S SONG

AN ANGEL'S SONG

We ventured out in the gray of night,
On amber furrows beneath the linden trees,
Where the breeze caressed you're naked knees,
Smooth as a stream, kissed by the moonlight.
The fountains which sobbed in the marble square
Bequeathed to the brisk, aromatic air
A somnolence of grace, repose and song,
As me worshiped you're black and braided hair,
Which sighed to the stars, mellifluous and long.

John Lars Zwerenz

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The typos are do to a computer glitch. My apologies. John Lars Zwerenz

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"The typos are "do" to a computer glitch." thats bollocks, and you know it.
you are too good to allow a piece to be posted with typos,

I'm guessing that you use misspellings as a hook to draw a reader into "you're" piece.

Obi.

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