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I walk the line walk the line

I walk the line between life and death
This apple's rotten, rotten to the core
Get up, get up, off your knees
Get down, get down, on your knees!
I walk the line
I walk the line
I walk the line
Between life and death
My business is a little ninjitsu
I trust so much I don't walk I merely stagger!
No you wouldn't accept & I don't blame you
No I don't blame ya!
I walk the line
I walk the line
I walk the line
I walk the line
Between life and death
My rent is 69 a day
I can't stand people
You know that's the price you pay
Is life all in vain?
Starts off in my arm
Opens up my brain
I'm already in the gutter -
Next stop is the grave!
I walk the line
I walk the line
I walk the line
I walk the line
Between life and death
Live fast, die old
Live fast, die older
I walk the line
Death
I walk the line
I walk the line
I walk the line
I walk the line
Between life and death
While others have been thinking about it - I've been to hell and back
I walk the line
I walk the line
I walk the line
I walk the line
Between pain and torture

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Comments

This is the kind of thing that could make a person crazy!
Welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

I take this to be a performance piece best read out at pace with vitriol, in a spittle flecked manner.
more lyrical than poetic? (no bad thing there then)
It has a hook.

Obi.

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