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THE CHANDELIER

When the CHANDELIER fuses
one remembers
the light that was
and
hopes some day
some one may replace
the beauty
the glamour the charm
that there ever was

The light has gone
the world stepped
into darkness
no Neopoet
condoled
a sad reflection

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Had Ian of UK been here...the world would have instantly known
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Nicely, for such a short piece. A great example of “more is less” in word usage.

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Raywhitakerblog.wordpress.com
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for your views so soon

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Revised you may refresh perhaps

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I noticed the difference. Who are you missing?

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Raywhitakerblog.wordpress.com
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I am not missing the world is

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