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WHEN I AM OLD (challenge contest)

I used to think when I am old
that I will be this or be that
But as blood thins with coming cold
I've worn many a different hat.

So now that I have reached that age
i look back and laugh at young ambitions.
Once in a while I even rage
at the chosen false directions.

The trail behind fades with its length,
The one before me isn't near as long.
So I just hope I have the strength
to sing the ending of my song.

And any hoped for passing fame
I am now content won't come my way.
I'll become a minor extinguished flame
snuffed and discarded on the way.....

Dare I hope some distant day
one person might recall my words
which I scribbled down while on my way
and not consider them absurd?

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Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
OK another rare one posted straight from hollow head to page lol
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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A great last line - I was surprised by it and even laughed a little.

Always good to see somebody new show up. welcome to neopoet. should you run into problems here just holler. If i can't help I'll do my best to point you to somebody who can. now that last line......There was no other word that popped into mind that rhymed lol

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Always good to see somebody new show up. welcome to neopoet. should you run into problems here just holler. If i can't help I'll do my best to point you to somebody who can. now that last line......There was no other word that popped into mind that rhymed lol

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I THOUGHT IT WAS AWESOME UNTIL YOU SAID TURDS

I THOUGHT IT WAS AWESOME UNTIL YOU SAID TURDS

As stated this was posted without any edit. BUT one day I'll come back and see if i can improve the ending

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I am sorry you have spoiled a very funny ending!

just decide to chang it back

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when
I wonder

This is pretty obscure

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WHEN I AM OLD
I was wondering why you said
when
lol
though ur not as old as me yet
stan
nice poem tho

old keeps getting higher as years pile up?lol

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learn
Pole Vault
while the wait is on
and ur aiming the sky lol stan

Wasn't that good at it but the competition wasn't either so I'd sometimes place second lol

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In ALL my life I have never been No 1
except today
another site guy
has placed me as No 1
........... ''poet for this week.........'''
thanks to thee mostly '
Stan
and
NEOS
for all your teachings and blessings

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